There are in my opinion, few reasons as to why this is so in the developed countries.
Firstly, in these developed countries the population is driven by their occupation and their standard of living. They believe in order to get ahead and be ahead with those from a lesser socio-economic background, they have to work extra hard and long hours at their workplaces. This has made most workaholics with little or rather no time dedicated towards physical health activities spending little or no time at a gym or a recreational centre.
Secondly, workplace peer pressure comes with immense mental stress in an attempt to meet deadlines. This can hinder an individuals physical health in turn. They may not realise it but the harm being done to the cardiovascular system, the blood vessels and blood pressure, the eyes and well as their limbs is detrimental to their overall physical health.
Furthermore, workplace related injuries due to prolonged sitting or standing or even slipping due to inattention can result in deterioration of physical health.
Therefore, despite the fact that there are many more modern therapies available for ailments within healthcare,due to the reasons I have discussed has led to a fall is physical health. This can come with huge costs to the individual as well as huge legal costs to employer if proven guilty.
In order to overcome this, the public should be made more aware of the problems of poor physical health and how to overcome such problems. Stepping up using the television, radio, newspapers, journals and social media educating the public of benefits of a healthy lifestyle is beneficial. Implementing minimum mandatory working hours and employers in my opinion should take up an active role in not overworking their employees.
Afterall, to be deemed healthy one requires to be in total equilibrium in all aspects of mental,physical and spiritual health.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'as to', 'as well as', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.22629969419 0.247107183377 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.14373088685 0.155533422707 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.162079510703 0.0946595960268 171% => OK
Adverbs: 0.039755351682 0.0501214627716 79% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0336391437309 0.0437548338989 77% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107033639144 0.122226691241 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0519877675841 0.0403226058552 129% => OK
Conjunctions: 4.00416346657 2.80594681477 143% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0489296636086 0.0326793684256 150% => OK
Particles: 0.00611620795107 0.00163938923432 373% => OK
Determiners: 0.085626911315 0.0861772015684 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0183486238532 0.021408717616 86% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00611620795107 0.011925033212 51% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1895.0 1933.35771543 98% => OK
No of words: 291.0 316.048096192 92% => OK
Chars per words: 6.51202749141 6.12580529183 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20517956788 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.384879725086 0.374742101984 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.309278350515 0.28420135186 109% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.233676975945 0.203846283523 115% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.161512027491 0.137316102897 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.00416346657 2.80594681477 143% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.037074148 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611683848797 0.56093040696 109% => OK
Word variations: 68.2785550159 60.7387585426 112% => OK
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0891783567 44% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 41.5714285714 20.7743622355 200% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 133.537276 49.517814964 270% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 270.714285714 127.492653851 212% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 41.5714285714 20.7743622355 200% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.0 0.814263465372 246% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38877755511 159% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 3.99599198397 576% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 72.499263623 49.1944974215 147% => OK
Elegance: 1.77464788732 1.69124875643 105% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.451967237857 0.332605444948 136% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.145942949228 0.102741220458 142% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0381152934264 0.0668466124924 57% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 1.0 0.534860350844 187% => Sentence paragraph similarity is high.
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 4.19624860425e-16 0.148594505496 0% => Sentences are similar to each other in a paragraph.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.237030458301 0.134430193775 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506231856148 0.0742795772207 68% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.190310573307 0.324371583561 59% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.043998429167 0.0638462369009 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237030458301 0.228012699653 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506231856148 0.058150111329 87% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.68436873747 35% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.41683366733 59% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 5.90881763527 51% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 5.0 10.4468937876 48% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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