Do you believe that professional athletes make good role models for young people?
Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge or experience.
There is no person who does not love watching sports. With each passing day, interest in sports is increasing by young people especially. In this regard, young generations are affected by many professional athletes as well as they like to follow the athletes. So, these athletes have important role around the world due to their behaviours and style of life.
Firstly, young people are interested in top athletes. They see the athletes as their heroes, besides they want to be like their heroes. Many children want to play sports owing to this reason. It is worth noticing that playing sports teach important lessons. For example, if a child play team sports, they learn teamwork and doing quick maneuvers besides how to lose and win. Moreover, the professional athletes demonstrate necessary of working hard for your goals. It is obvious that this sportmen depict regularly practising is much more substantial than much practising. All of these things are good aspect of athletes models.
On the other hand, professional athletes are not always good role models. As a initial thing, though top are shown important, they do not live like normal people. It can be clearly understood that they earn much money and have fame. This means that any child might think money and fame are essential for sport. Turning to the sportsmen behaviours, the athletes who take some drugs to improve their performance send wrong message to children.
In conclusion, professional athletes can be very good model for young people so long as they contribute positively
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1328.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1673151751 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59526948516 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.603112840467 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 387.0 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.0259633226 49.4020404114 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.7777777778 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2777777778 20.7667163134 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216106733751 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680598295882 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635513156389 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147756164278 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387240025556 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.11 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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