Do you think that an ageing society will disappear? What are the advantages and disadvantages of having more old people in society?
Over the past decades, it is widely believed that the medical advancement has fostered the longevity around the globe. Despite the ensuring enhancement on well-being of average citizens, this seismic shift has begot a financial burden to our society. The aim of this essay is set to explore the societal benefit pertainning to additional manpower and a detrimental effect on economy.
To begin with, there is ample evidence suggested that the old people nowadays are generally perceived as workforce in some less strained domain. In fact, compared to our ancestors, having shaped a healthy habit with regular workouts and nourishment, senior people are deemed engrossed in producing values to the communities in their late life. Recent empirical research from the Elderly Committee ascertained that 70% retirees participated in voluntary works entailing part-time music teaching and homework tutoring. Seen in this light, these extra workforce generated by the elderly are likely to ameliorate the increasing demands necessitating by their neighbours.
Although the benefits given to neighbourhood are remarkable, the impact of the expanding senior group on overall nation should not be overstated. What this means is the fact that the major livelihood of the elderly has a high tendency to be underpinned by social security and pension they earned from the past employers. Having conducted an extensive study, the Hong Kong University established that the number of retired people who count on pension or social security has quadrupled over the pass 20 years. Considering with this line of thinking, this national expenditure has cumulated with ageing population. Meanwhile, coupled with the allowance that subsidising the concession fee for transportation, the economic development would be hindered under the growing contention in globalisation
In conclusion, while these passionate and committed senior workforce constitute auspicious assistants in the neighbourhood, they are also tentamount to impediments to national development. Yet, it is predicted that the ageing process will remain insurmountable in foreseeable future due to the progress of science and technology.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 795, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the growing contention in globalisation In conclusion, while these passionate an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, well, while, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1862.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71165644172 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10823848005 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641104294479 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.4820992749 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.230769231 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0769230769 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92307692308 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0795862139715 0.244688304435 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0254844659143 0.084324248473 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0307365323418 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.040906521243 0.151304729494 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243185446995 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.13 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.27 8.58950901804 131% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 78.4519038076 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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