Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view.
Sky diving and skiing are strong-sense sport which is extremely high-risk and should not be allowed or even it should be prohibited. From my point of view, I reckon that both sky diving and skiing are healthy sport if we have proper solutions to prevent players from danger.
Extreme sport is not only an exciting sport but it also is a chance to train soft skills. For those who want to challenge themself, this kind of sport may be an optimal choice. If they perform well, that will be a great victory in their life. In addition, practicing this soft skill in real life is impressive. For instance, most countries like Canada, Russia, Japan, etc, are featured by snow mountain ranges. Moving on the snow by foot is inevitable, so we would better utilize a plank or trunk. Or, if your airplane is crashed and you must jump out, you will never fear because you are trained.
Undeniable that strong-sense sport is perplexed. We have several solutions to minimize this danger. First, we elect healthy people without acute diseases or chronic diseases such as heart or bone disease, who has mental trouble. Second, protective clothes and rescue system should be upgraded and examined regularly. Last but not least, participants must obey the rules and practice carefully and systematically with experienced trainers.
In a brief, extreme sports like sky diving and skiing is considered to be unsafe and should be prohibited. However, that idea is not completely right because the excitement, challenge, and soft skills are its advantages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
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Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
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...om my point of view, I reckon that both sky diving and skiing are healthy sport if we have...
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Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
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...ners. In a brief, extreme sports like sky diving and skiing is considered to be unsafe a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, well, for instance, i reckon, in addition, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 41.998997996 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1282.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98832684825 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66457143889 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630350194553 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 388.8 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.2791558475 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.125 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0625 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327588202606 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.089982456145 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0924260686421 0.0667982634062 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198058670979 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0782111588189 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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