Government investment in the arts such as music and theatre is a waste of money Governments must invest this money in public services instead Do you agree or disagree

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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

Ministry better to distributes money to public service than spending cost to establish arts like a music or theather. I totally agree with this opinion and think that goverment should be funds to develop public service.
Firstly, not all people like to listen the music. Even if all people like to heard music but it's can't being society is welfare, music only for stress out, but just a bit positive effect that can we get. In other words, goverment must to have the best way to increase happiness for people and can give stead for society, one of the most strategy that can develop by improvement public service, through this way all people can get comfort from facilities that country have. For instance, Jakarta was a centre city in Indonesia, and many people leaved in there, whereas, for consequently is many population can't control and many transportation every day in the way that made traffic jamp in every where we go, however the government gives a solution for made some pathway particulary for busway and that make all people feel conveniently with the situation. That's why public service is very important for encorage all activities society in the world.
Secondly, public service can create loves nationality from all person. Almost all society think if the goverment nothing to do for rise up luxury of people, the ministry only thinking about their self and feel the society is nothing effect for establish the country, in fact, all income which received by government by society. Cooperatiom beetwen goverment and society is very essential because these method can make the country being a sucsessfull, and the best method for show it by serve what the society need. For example, establishment for toll road only focus in the big city but in small city the progress was very slowest, Aceh is one of province in Aceh and since 2019 until now the toll road not finished with the reason nothing fund for support it. Thus, Aceh is needed toll road because the province is so big and with that can brief the time for vacation.
To conclude, public service is very crucial for push our country, through this method that can make our country be observed by another country.

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2023-03-07 Desi Sari Ayuni 67 view
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Ministry) must be used with a third-person verb: 'betters', 'wells'.
Suggestion: betters; wells
Ministry better to distributes money to public service ...
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Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'distribute'.
Suggestion: distribute
Ministry better to distributes money to public service than spending c...
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Line 2, column 97, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... all people like to heard music but its cant being society is welfare, music only fo...
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Line 2, column 229, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...t can we get. In other words, goverment must to have the best way to increase happiness...
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Line 2, column 604, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...as, for consequently is many population cant control and many transportation every d...
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Line 2, column 621, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun transportation seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much transportation', 'a good deal of transportation'.
Suggestion: much transportation; a good deal of transportation
...tly is many population cant control and many transportation every day in the way that made traffic ...
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Line 2, column 688, Rule ID: EVERY_WHERE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'everywhere'?
Suggestion: everywhere
...ay in the way that made traffic jamp in every where we go, however the government gives a s...
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Line 2, column 855, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...e feel conveniently with the situation. Thats why public service is very important fo...
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Line 2, column 915, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'activities'' or 'activity's'?
Suggestion: activities'; activity's
...vice is very important for encorage all activities society in the world. Secondly, public...
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Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the goverment nothing to do for rise up luxury of people, the ministry only thin...
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Line 3, column 397, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this method' or 'these methods'?
Suggestion: this method; these methods
...t and society is very essential because these method can make the country being a sucsessful...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, whereas, for example, for instance, in fact, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83466666667 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43620980669 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514666666667 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.4316475427 49.4020404114 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.461538462 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8461538462 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3846153846 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106824860365 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519831745809 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048251325756 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0921493435793 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0647986461055 0.056905535591 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.33 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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