The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease the violent crimes in society. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
People believe that the violence in films and on television should be reduced in terms of decreasing the violent crimes in society. I would argue that controlling violence on media may not be the best method to solve the issues.
The rate of violent crime cannot be reduced by limiting the frequency of violence on media, because it is not the only way that people can receive the negative influence. Some people, such as children, are more easily impacted by school bullying and domestic violence, which makes younger generations believe that many problems can be solved by violence. Therefore, the risk of becoming violent criminals are higher without preventing these areas’ impact.
Compared to the films and TVs’ violence, some social problems are the main reasons to violent crimes. For example, education problems caused by unbalanced social resource distribution make people from poor families do not know the punishment of breaking laws. In addition, if they cannot improve their living standard by securing a better job, this hopeless life will make them desperate and become impulsive even anti-social, which makes them tend to solve problems by violence.
That is not to say that reducing violence on media do not have any positive effects on limiting violent crimes. Some films and serials establish abnormal value to audience, which is that the actors can escape the punishment from laws by some excellent skills to cover their law-breaking behaviors. As a result, people especially teenagers feel that they can benefit from these superb measures and do not need to pay for their violent behavior. therefore, limiting them also have advantages to reducing violence in real world.
In sum, the restriction of violence on media may be part of the effort to prevent violent crimes, but it is not the most efficient one.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 445, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...need to pay for their violent behavior. therefore, limiting them also have advantages to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, therefore, for example, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22408026756 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62278162579 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551839464883 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2945183403 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.153846154 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23076923077 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174073685251 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746730024239 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885259320748 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113408718807 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0915155765569 0.056905535591 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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