The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Obesity among youth is indeed an alarming issue that places a huge burden on healthcare organizations to cope with. While some people believe that incorporating physical training lessons into their schooling would best tackle this problem, I think that regulating their eating patterns is equally crucial.
The reason why one might regard fitness education as an optimal deterrent against obesity is that it would be a compulsory core subject. Knowing that they must do a strenuous workout during these classes, overweight schoolchildren are left with no chance but to exercise. More often than not, the training is followed by, say, a game of soccer or basketball which involves staying active for an extended period, thus burning calories and helping lose weight. Therefore, this solution is thought to be optimal in dealing with these children and easing the strain on the healthcare system.
However, I believe that only when consumption patterns of school children are controlled by both parents and governments, will the solution mentioned above be considered effective. If, for example, children keep exercising at their schools and simultaneously eat junk food that has no caloric value, all efforts to curb obesity will go in vain since there is a research-proven well-established link between diet and exercise. Thus, not only governments but also parents should exert efforts to ensure that children eat healthily both at schools and at home.
In conclusion, even though PE classes at schools are considered as the main way to solve the obesity among the youth, I believe that as long as eating patterns are not controlled by governments and parents, the problem is insurmountable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1433.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32713754647 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93075467719 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.646840148699 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.0499716231 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.3 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.3 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160530824448 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599854077058 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626024326409 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0948842816263 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595689722203 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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