How do you think society will be affected by the growth of telecommunicating?
In recent decades, the booming of technology brought a large number of conveniences to humankind and one of the most advantages is the development of teleworking. As far as, I am concerned, this trend gives both benefits and negatives to society. In the following essay, I will present the reasons why I believe in it.
On the one hand, it is undeniable that people work and study without going to their schools and their offices are a natural process in the technological era because of its perks such as a flexible schedule, cost-effective, and time-saving. In particular, employees can telecommunicate easily instead of commuting from and to their workplaces, which means they employ for an organization from their home and communicate with the main offices and their customers by phones, emails, or via the internet. As a result, they not only can arrange their free times suiting to the working timetable but also save time and the cost of travelling from their houses to the location of their companies and returning, hence they could spend their saved period of time in order to learn and gain more qualifications that pave the way for the career.
On the other hand, in spite of the benefits that people would reap certainly, however drawbacks of this phenomenon should not be ignored. In specific, telecommunicating is a key contributing factor behind the less growth of the transportation service since the using frequency of this industry of employees will be decreased. The more officers offered jobs which they can do at their homes by employers the more positions are serving in the described field might be unemployed.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the development of teleworking caused demerits and benefits to society. Thus, the government should enact a suitable policy to cope with this problem.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 54, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ades, the booming of technology brought a large number of conveniences to humankind and one of th...
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Line 2, column 740, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ing, hence they could spend their saved period of time in order to learn and gain more qualifi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, thus, in conclusion, in particular, such as, as a result, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1546.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11920529801 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22296183737 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592715231788 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.2975951904 182% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 124.002961154 49.4020404114 251% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 193.25 106.682146367 181% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.75 20.7667163134 182% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.375 7.06120827912 218% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0821316646752 0.244688304435 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.037874091926 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543696018395 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0510996268943 0.151304729494 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662738121785 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.6 13.0946893788 165% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 11.3001002004 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.1190380762 166% => OK
text_standard: 22.0 10.7795591182 204% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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