An increasing trend now a days is for young adults to play computer games. Some people say this is a negative development.
Discuss and give your opinion.
In contemporary ea, technology has entered each and every field. Nowadays, more and more people are becoming addicted to the computer games and this is especially true in case of young adults. According to my opinion, this is dangerous for both individuals and society.
To commence with, the foremost reason is increase in the number of violent video games which leads to more crime. These days adults are addicted to these types of games which results in their aggressive nature towards their families, friends and relationships. For instance, a recent news article in 'Hindu Times' was about a boy who beheaded his father as he stopped him from playing PubG. Apart from this, various other examples are also there like suicide due to blue whale , accidents due to Pokemon go and many more. These all factors are impacting our society and leading individuals towards the dark future.
Furthermore, due to the addiction of these computer games, individuals are less concentrated in their work which is responsible for the poor performance at workplace. The main cause for this is that they play computer games overnight which gives them sleepy head at job. This hampers their promotion which overall effects their personal life. A recent study by University of Windsor revealed that 60% people are working inefficient in meeting the demands of the employers and one of the main reason behind this is playing video games.
To recapitulate the given points, I must say that it clearly proven that gaming habbit in young adults is a negative development for individual, home and society.
In contemporary ea, technology has entered each and every field. Now a days, more and more people are becoming addicted to the computer games and this is especially true in case of young adults. According to my opinion, this is dangerous for both individuals and society.
To commence with, the foremost reason is increase in the number of violent video games which leads to more crime. These days adults are addicted to these types of games which results in their aggressive nature towards their families,friends and relationships.For instance, a recent news article in 'Hindu Times' was about a boy beheaded his father as he stopped him from playing PubG. Apart from this, various other examples are also there like suicide due to blue whale , accidents due to Pokemon go and many more. These all factors are impacting our society and leading individuals towards the dark future.
Furthermore, due to the addiction of these computer games, individuals are less concentrated in their work which is responsible for the poor performance at workplace. The main cause for this is that they play computer games overnight which gives them sleepy head at job. This hampers their promotion which overall effects their personal life. A recent study by University of Windsor revealed that 60% people are working inefficient in meeting the demands of the employers and one of the main reason behind this is playing playing video games.
To recapitulate the given points, I must say that it clearly proven that gaming habbit in young adults is a negative development for individual, home and society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, apart from, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1341.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13793103448 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74790340747 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.620689655172 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2472100242 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.75 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 7.06120827912 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247494855734 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0812279573481 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594832786893 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14663081403 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440667247337 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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