The internet has revolutionized the modern world,but it has also created new problems and inequalities.Do you agree or disagree?
The advancement in the technology has revolutionized the modern world. Multiple tasks can be completed with the help of internet. However,at the same time internet acts as a bane because of numerous negative prospects. In my perception, internet, indeed created problems and inequalities.
To begin with,it has been seen that internet lead to change in the dynamics of working style. It is undeniable that in this fast pace world, internet helps an individual in a countless ways. For an illustration,internet banking, submissions of form etcetera. Moreover,internet also connects the world for an example various social sites such as Facebook, Twitter, Orkut and many more.One could reach to his/her near and dear ones by merely clicking some keys. Additionally,e-mail dramatically changed the working scenario over the world. Furthermore, every rose has thrones, likewise internet comprises of immense problems such as pornography,the vast porn industry reaches to the young developing minds through internet and leaves a negative impact. Consequently,youths get distracted from desired goals and society
Moving further,limitation,besides substantial benefits,internet is not available to the poor. Together with,there may also be danger of viruses which could damage the system completely. In the recent past, these viruses are used by hackers to damage the sites of national importance. Henceforth,there is huge risks of damaging the bank accounts by cynical people. Internet also creates an ideology of access, on one hand the elderly people are least able to access the internet as compared to the youths which ultimately lead to generation gap.
To recapitulate, I would like to say that one must enjoy the advancement but with proper cautions.
- Even though doctors all over the world agree that fast food is bad for people's health, more and more people are eating it. Why are more people eating fast food? What can be done about this problem? 62
- The use of CCTV(close circuit television)cameras in streets,stations,shops and other public places has increased rapidly in recent years. Although we are told that these cameras help in fight against crime, some people are opposed to their use.They believ 70
- Some people believe that there should be no speed limit for vehicles on multi-lane highways between cities.Others believe that a speed limit on every highway is necessary for people's safety. 60
- Some people think men and women have different natural abilities that make them suitable for different types of work Others however believe that both men and women can be equally suited to do any type of work Discuss both views and give your own opinion 80
- The environment is one of the most important issue in the world today but government are not doing enough about it To what extent do you think that individuals can help to protect the environment 53
that internet lead to change
that Internet leads to the changes
flaws:
The content is not well organized. Look, this is your style:
para 1: introduction
para 2: good + bad
para 3: bad
para 4: in my opinion...
Better like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1
para 3: reason 2
para 4: reason 3 (optional)
para 5: conclusion
or:
para 1: introduction
para 2: idea one.
para 3: however, idea two
para 4: in my opinion...
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 279 350
No. of Characters: 1444 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.087 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.176 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.746 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.412 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.008 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.299 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.493 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.065 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5