The internet has revolutionized the modern world,but it has also created new problems and inequalities.Do you agree or disagree?
The advancement in the technology has revolutionized the modern world. Multiple tasks can be completed with the help of internet. However,at the same time internet acts as a bane because of numerous negative prospects. In my perception, internet, indeed created problems and inequalities.
To begin with,it has been seen that internet lead to change in the dynamics of working style. It is undeniable that in this fast pace world, internet helps an individual in a countless ways. For an illustration,internet banking, submissions of form etcetera. Moreover,internet also connects the world for an example various social sites such as Facebook, Twitter, Orkut and many more.One could reach to his/her near and dear ones by merely clicking some keys. Additionally,e-mail dramatically changed the working scenario over the world. Furthermore, every rose has thrones, likewise internet comprises of immense problems such as pornography,the vast porn industry reaches to the young developing minds through internet and leaves a negative impact. Consequently,youths get distracted from desired goals and society
Moving further,limitation,besides substantial benefits,internet is not available to the poor. Together with,there may also be danger of viruses which could damage the system completely. In the recent past, these viruses are used by hackers to damage the sites of national importance. Henceforth,there is huge risks of damaging the bank accounts by cynical people. Internet also creates an ideology of access, on one hand the elderly people are least able to access the internet as compared to the youths which ultimately lead to generation gap.
To recapitulate, I would like to say that one must enjoy the advancement but with proper cautions.
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that internet lead to change
that Internet leads to the changes
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