It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents for instance for sport or music and others are not However it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician Discuss both these views and

We live in an age when many things are usually improved and developed day by day. Children, who is the future person, will control the world for the next many years. They have lots of art talents such as music or sport when they were born. However, some people believe that art talents can be taught for children.

First of all, when we were born, we are chosen some talents at different types and we call it is certain talents. Therefore, people have this talents such as sport or music while they do not know why they have this talents. Although lots of people dream art talents, others have acdemic talents such as doing Math well or feeling some paragragh of Literature. For example, the trend which students in many schools often study better at some subjects they like or suitable. They can become one of the best students who study Math well while they outstanding in music or sport.

On the other hand, the world and education in nowadays are developed. Besides, people think that all things must be perfect. Despite the fact that some people have art talents when they were born, they can be taught these talent when they were young. For instance, governments build a lot of art school to respond people's hobby. Therefore, parents can bring children to these school to study art talents such as music or sport. Alternatively, people need to observe children's hobby or what they like, what they want, they doing well in what to study art talents in the best way.

In conclusion, I think some people have certain talents such as sport or music and others have academic talents will successful in the future. Similarly, people have these art talents through they is taught is also one of the best factors improve and develop the world. As the result, all of us are living in modern life.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, if, similarly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66981132075 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20059513833 2.80592935109 78% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471698113208 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.1228241915 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.5 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260626326377 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101368827503 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741303021821 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1957405177 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0212759635303 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.0946893788 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.01 8.58950901804 82% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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