It is generally discussed among the public that extreme sports such as sky diving and rock-climbing should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, there are millions of sports for people to enjoy. However, some of sports may be fatal to health due to the risk involves with the sports and usually those are engaging in extreme sports. Some people claim that those extreme sports should be banned because of the risk of people’s lives. While I understand the risk involves within the extreme sports may lead to fatal injuries and even threaten people’s lives, the choice of playing sports should be remaining on people’s hands.
As society develops, people have sought more and distinctive types of entertainment especially in sports. As a result of this, there is several types of sports can be enjoyed despite some of them may be dangerous to play in nature. Therefore, it appears that those sports might require some supervision.
Those extreme sports may lead to fatal injuries and that could result in loss of life. Due to this nature of sports, these sports should be restricted. In this modern era, people are enjoying from being freedom. From this, people are even created of dangerous sports and that lead many people into death. According to American weekly journal, most of young people are dream to be the extreme sport players such as F1 players due to the wealth salaries and reputation which shadowed of its dark side of risks and fatal injuries. It also presents, the second highest death in the US in 1990 was extreme sports which was 0.5% lesser than the car accident’s ratios. From this example, we can conclude that extreme sports are deadliness and fatality in its nature. Therefore, it is reasonable to prevent people’s lives from participating in suicidal actions.
In contrast, extreme sports are the mere choice from people. Even though those extreme sports are dangerous and can cost someone’s lives, sportsmen have chosen those paths. In other words, all those extreme sports players are aware of consequences and acknowledge of their risks before even begin their career path in those types of sports. Thus, by banning those rights can be considered as restricting people’s careers. For example, F1 players or sky divers are well known of their circumstances because they are always heard of the risks and consequences before playing the sports. If people are taken the career paths as an extreme sport player, then it is their choice they made as an adult. Therefore, these decisions should be respected and confirmed instead of restricting and limiting the choices due to the risky consequences.
In conclusion, despite the diversity sport types, extreme sports can be fatal to human as it can cost someone’s lives. However, it is not reasonable to prevent those sports from playing because of risky consequences. The reason for this is, the players of extreme sports are chosen to play those sports as a career path and they are passionate about their jobs. Therefore, restricting those sports from playing can mean that it is restricting people’s positions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 128, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are several types'?
Suggestion: there are several types
...ecially in sports. As a result of this, there is several types of sports can be enjoyed despite some o...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'in contrast', 'such as', 'as a result', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.243944636678 0.247107183377 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.155709342561 0.155533422707 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0951557093426 0.0946595960268 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0363321799308 0.0501214627716 72% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0346020761246 0.0437548338989 79% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129757785467 0.122226691241 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0536332179931 0.0403226058552 133% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.73573008087 2.80594681477 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0259515570934 0.0326793684256 79% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0865051903114 0.0861772015684 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0294117647059 0.021408717616 137% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00346020761246 0.011925033212 29% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3000.0 1933.35771543 155% => OK
No of words: 490.0 316.048096192 155% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.12244897959 6.12580529183 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.20517956788 112% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.402040816327 0.374742101984 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.257142857143 0.28420135186 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.155102040816 0.203846283523 76% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.108163265306 0.137316102897 79% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73573008087 2.80594681477 97% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.037074148 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.418367346939 0.56093040696 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.0628584425 60.7387585426 77% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 16.0891783567 162% => OK
Sentence length: 18.8461538462 20.7743622355 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9940824132 49.517814964 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.384615385 127.492653851 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8461538462 20.7743622355 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.653846153846 0.814263465372 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 44.5604395604 49.1944974215 91% => OK
Elegance: 1.88549618321 1.69124875643 111% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269104985791 0.332605444948 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.119681772547 0.102741220458 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0830671074944 0.0668466124924 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.506179052065 0.534860350844 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133848338429 0.148594505496 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114722442805 0.134430193775 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046533386247 0.0742795772207 63% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.46185450109 0.324371583561 142% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0966883366254 0.0638462369009 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204658678157 0.228012699653 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299633927452 0.058150111329 52% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.68436873747 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 3.9879759519 426% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 5.90881763527 102% => OK
Negative topic words: 15.0 2.5751503006 582% => Less negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 24.0 10.4468937876 230% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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