It is more important for schoolchildren to learn local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In today’s world, there are many people who think that it is more crucial for young people to learn international history than their local history. From my perspective, there are several benefits for them to learn more history around the world including gaining knowledge about culture and traditions or also helping them to understand the importance of history. However, local history is still essential because they need to know the hardship though their mind can respect ancestors and appreciate their country.
Admittedly, there are some various benefits when they learn world history. First, educating about world history is believed to equalize learning new things opportunities among young adolescents regardless of their family background. This world history support, presumably, tends not only to increase the overall awareness of students about appreciating other countries that help their country but also to mitigate their feeling inferior when they travel abroad or travel to other countries. In addition, knowing about world history would help them to make new friends on social media and boost the international relationship between homelands, thereby adding great benefits for sustainability development. Second, learning about world history would result in a higher supply of highly qualified workers, who know about the culture and tradition of open-minded people, which benefits society in the long run. For example, there are many countries such as Japan and China. Vietnam always teaches their students to know about world war or world history so that they can learn new knowledge and respect other countries. In fact, it is acknowledged that knowledgeable and skilled human capital is imperative to foster economic growth and technological development in any nation.
On the other hand, I suppose local history is still crucial. From one standpoint, everyone from every age group should know about their country, the hardship in the past so that they can appreciate their ancestors. In addition, gaining knowledge about local history would help them to respect their country and know what happened in the hundreds of years. Second, educating the schoolchildren about that would increase the awareness of low-income people and also protect their country in the future. For instance, Vietnam is not the wealthiest country but they are always teaching both things including local and national history, which promotes an egalitarian society. Instead, would be a more educated viable option if the resources were focused on supporting less privileged yet gifted people if they do not have funding to go to school.
In conclusion, despite the long-term benefits of world history, all young children should learn about their country to help developing nations. From my point of view, governments, especially schools, should consider educating together to become a better society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 20, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...ent in any nation. On the other hand, I suppose local history is still crucial....
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Line 4, column 125, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to develop' or 'develop'.
Suggestion: to develop; develop
...hould learn about their country to help developing nations. From my point of view, governm...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, still, for example, for instance, i suppose, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2457.0 1615.20841683 152% => OK
No of words: 445.0 315.596192385 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52134831461 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72699568972 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501123595506 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.0 506.74238477 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.180711486 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.315789474 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4210526316 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94736842105 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255697370264 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916419623387 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695674415747 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16702651192 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.092284237729 0.056905535591 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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