It is often said that to become a successful businessman, a tertiary education is not all necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. Give your opinion with relevant examples
regardless of dramatic impacts derived from higher education, a group of individuals have argued that there is neither reason nor necessary to go to universities to become a successful businessman. Though there will be an increase in the number of people approving with this statement, I strongly hold a belief that having a tertiary education would reap an array of benefits to become a successful businessman rather than not conducting it.
There are a few rationales to explain why many hold a belief that getting a higher education is able to bring a variety of beneficial ramifications to create a wealthy businessman. The first reason is that youngsters are likely to mobilize their business knowledge even further in tertiary education. Thanks to this, students will be offered more perfect opportunities to get a deeper insight into academic knowledge regarding the world of business. As a result, this knowledge act as a good foundation to keep abreast of current fairs before getting involved in the cutthroat business world. For instance, Shark Khoa who is known as one of the tops of a prosperous businessman not only in Viet Nam but also the global, also reliant on the knowledge stemmed from his colleges to get the new high of his business these days.
Furthermore, besides taking students’ understanding even further, impersonal skills originated from the colleges are also a handy advantage which advocates students to develop themselves. First and foremost, the colleges perpetually operate a multitude of extra-curricular activities for their students, generating a host of merits regarding business skills. Taking the organization of presentation days as shining example, learners would have a room for improvements in terms of debated skills spurring an ineluctable chance of enhancing the business skills considerably. Another fact is that graduated qualifications is likely to be subject to their future career path regarding business. To be more specific, it is when they have a demand to co-operate with other talented investors, the qualifications are considered as the key to enhancing the investors’ belief, and thus the rate of business would be significantly promoted.
In conclusion, as cited above, the phenomenon of learning in higher education has a predisposition to offer more tremendous merits which is of paramount importance in the competitive business world to become a successful businessman.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Regardless
regardless of dramatic impacts derived from higher...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 43, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun hold seems to be countable; consider using: 'many holds'.
Suggestion: many holds
...ere are a few rationales to explain why many hold a belief that getting a higher educatio...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, regarding, so, thus, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 381.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42782152231 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24127322557 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553805774278 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.1444525632 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.076923077 106.682146367 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3076923077 20.7667163134 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127354807288 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.043861426 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534255075046 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0936148194624 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711938953099 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.81 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 9.78957915832 215% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 10.7795591182 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Regardless
regardless of dramatic impacts derived from higher...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 43, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun hold seems to be countable; consider using: 'many holds'.
Suggestion: many holds
...ere are a few rationales to explain why many hold a belief that getting a higher educatio...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, regarding, so, thus, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 381.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42782152231 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24127322557 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553805774278 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.1444525632 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.076923077 106.682146367 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3076923077 20.7667163134 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127354807288 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.043861426 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534255075046 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0936148194624 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711938953099 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.81 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 9.78957915832 215% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 10.7795591182 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.