It is said that the fast pace of our everyday life, as a direct result of the rapid development of telecommunication technology and travel industry, has negative effects on individuals, nations and globe. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
People have different opinions on the impact of long-distance communication technology and travel industry on inhabitants, as well as national and global scales. While some people think that the development of these factors has disadvantages, I believe that they bring both various potential benefits and several drawbacks to our life.
Admittedly, advances in telecommunication technology and travelling have made fundamental changes to the way life operates which have some drawbacks. Firstly, it is common knowledge that the use of digital devices like mobile phones or laptops are so highly addictive that people could spend many hours browsing social networking sites such as Facebook, Twitter to chat to others without a care in the world. As a result, the likelihood of individuals developing a sedentary life and being insulation from the community is high since this type of telecommunication may discourage them from direct interactions. Secondly, international criminals using online private connections could be seen as a challenge for governments. In fact, many authorities have to face to illegal border crossings or drug and weapon trade, which may cause social turmoil, political unrest and international friction.
Despite of negative impacts of telecommunication services and travel industry, I believe that they are great value for our socio-economic development. It is apparent that the innovations of technological gadgets have numerous functions that enable people to contact with everyone at ease regardless of geographical distance between them. For example, many applications such as Skype or Messenger offer video calls which allow overseas students to make use of to keep in touch with their parents at home. In terms of transportation and travelling, in recent decades there has been a substantial diversification in international tourism destinations, and many developing countries have experienced phenomenal growth in tourist arrivals and receipts. Consequently, not only can this achievement bring considerable source of income to community dwellers, contributing to the improvement of living standard of society as a whole, but also help build friendship and goodwill between nations.
In conclusion, although the rapid changes in telecommunication systems and travel industry causes several problems, it seems to me that their positive impacts on our daily life and international connections are undeniable.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 975, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'friendlier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: friendlier
...help build the goodwill between nations more friendlier. In conclusion, although the rapid c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2094.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 362.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.78453038674 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.40199174249 2.80592935109 121% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627071823204 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.825645427 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.076923077 106.682146367 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8461538462 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8461538462 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159601080021 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548275580644 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521201561161 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10081493217 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0154591309298 0.056905535591 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 13.0946893788 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 50.2224549098 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.54 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.65 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 78.4519038076 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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