in many countries, people are concerned about the number of children are overweight. What do you think and what are your suggest?
In terms of obesity rate in young people tend to go up among many nations worldwide which lead to the serious issue of citizens. The problem is considered as the outcome of the amount of junk food thriving as well as technology advancements. This essay discusses about some core reasons of that as well as ultimate solutions we can apply so as to combat the problem.
According to a range of surveys and studies, the rising of fast food businesses and techonology developments play a fundamental role in gaining weight of children. In the first place, it is true that these unhealthy food contains inordinate amount of fatty substances which are lack of valuable nutrition.Intaking a mass consumptions of them causes such long-term benefits as obesity and increases other risks such as cardiovascular diseases, high level of lipid in your blood and stroke. On the other hand, the impacts of modern technologies tend to show their drawbacks vividly to influence overweight rates in young people. Based on these conveniences, children are likely to abuse computer games as well as social networks so that it is a profound challenge for them to get rid of their own rooms or get involed in outdoor activities. Furthermore, these consequences lead to the lack of physical excersises and obviously be the reason for becoming obese.
As the results, every individual and the governments literally take such a huge responsibility to fight this mutual issuse. It is highly benificial for our health to do exercise at least 30 minutes every day and the minimum is 3 days per week. Plus, there are some available alternatives for entertainment instead of immersing to the vitural life such as books, going camping, cooking, etc which not only help you get rid of computers, but also find out and reinforce your potentials significantly. Ultimatetly, the authorities have to minimize the period of fast and processed food advertisings on TV and other media as well as be more stricter to give tax to fatty food. Beside, they should encourage the implement of projects and studies about nuttrion in communities in order to conduct balanced diets for somebody who is in need.
In conclusion, there are 2 elements of forming the increase of obesity children: the sharp rising of fast food industries and the modern societies make people gradually inactive. Following this, citizens and governments would rather aware of their duties to do excersices and pushing back the influences of “empty nutrition food”. We need a great patience for the problem based on intercooperation developments that go hand in hand with the truly sense of keeping well beings of whole people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, well, as to, at least, in conclusion, such as, as well as, it is true, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2230.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 440.0 315.596192385 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06818181818 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00047861196 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 176.041082164 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590909090909 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.9630557739 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.375 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1875 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.085126485097 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0251961806267 0.084324248473 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0205759281054 0.0667982634062 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0509585309336 0.151304729494 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00413281778799 0.056905535591 7% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 78.4519038076 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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