In many countries, young people are granted certain privileges and responsibility at the age of sixteen. Clearly parents have a responsibility to prepare their children as they approach this important milestone. To what degree should parents intervene in

16 year ago is a crucial watershed in people’s growth, after which children are regarded as adults in many countries. Parents are always frustrated when they ponder on whether and how they should step in to help their children tide over this transient period. If I am asked, I personally recommend that parents should intervene but keep more room for children’s own choice.

Firstly, it is our common sense that people can only learn swimming when they physically are in the water. Likewise, when children are confronted to the real society to live as individuals, they are supposed to make their own choices based on their own assumption, prediction and assessment. Whereas, parents should play a role as consultants and advisors as they are more sophisticated in social experience than 14-15 year old children. Similar to swimming, it is the children who should do the practice, while parents need to accompany closely to give instructions.

Secondly, in case problems or failures occur when things develop off the track. Parents are required to step in and help to work out solutions to the problems. As parents are our first teachers, they are for good as well. A family meeting is recommended to size up the situation and figure out possible redemptive measures for the adults-to-be. Both parties can contribute their thoughts during the discussion while priority should be given to the ideas of the children. There is a saying that Success is obtained from experience, while experience derives from failures. Smart parents know how to lead their 14-15 old children out of the swamp and encourage them to face up against any difficulties so that their children are able to live better and more independent lives later.

In conclusion, parents always play crucial roles in the growth of their children, especially at the critical moment when their children are at the threshold of 16-year-old. A good guidance from the parents can help the adults-to-be tide over the “birth pain” successfully. This is inborn responsibility of parents as well.

Votes
Average: 6.4 (3 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 60, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to swim'.
Suggestion: to swim
...common sense that people can only learn swimming when they physically are in the water. ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 569, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...accompany closely to give instructions. Secondly, in case problems or failures o...
^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'likewise', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'well', 'whereas', 'while', 'in conclusion']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228260869565 0.247107183377 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.163043478261 0.155533422707 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0842391304348 0.0946595960268 89% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0489130434783 0.0501214627716 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0570652173913 0.0437548338989 130% => OK
Prepositions: 0.130434782609 0.122226691241 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0326086956522 0.0403226058552 81% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.85045072596 2.80594681477 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0407608695652 0.0326793684256 125% => OK
Particles: 0.0108695652174 0.00163938923432 663% => OK
Determiners: 0.0733695652174 0.0861772015684 85% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0217391304348 0.021408717616 102% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0244565217391 0.011925033212 205% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2068.0 1933.35771543 107% => OK
No of words: 337.0 316.048096192 107% => OK
Chars per words: 6.13649851632 6.12580529183 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20517956788 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.370919881306 0.374742101984 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.296735905045 0.28420135186 104% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.216617210682 0.203846283523 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.145400593472 0.137316102897 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85045072596 2.80594681477 102% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.037074148 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551928783383 0.56093040696 98% => OK
Word variations: 59.8564938652 60.7387585426 99% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0891783567 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.8235294118 20.7743622355 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.684540478 49.517814964 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.647058824 127.492653851 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8235294118 20.7743622355 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.705882352941 0.814263465372 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.99599198397 50% => OK
Readability: 49.4971199162 49.1944974215 101% => OK
Elegance: 1.45454545455 1.69124875643 86% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.458091375499 0.332605444948 138% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0836127264612 0.102741220458 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0512699130042 0.0668466124924 77% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.490524745767 0.534860350844 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.154695644527 0.148594505496 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176252664085 0.134430193775 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757499090102 0.0742795772207 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.446176345492 0.324371583561 138% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0669689809499 0.0638462369009 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.332520495926 0.228012699653 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00961955334544 0.058150111329 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.68436873747 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.41683366733 59% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 5.90881763527 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.5751503006 116% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 10.4468937876 134% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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