Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree with this view? What other things can people do in order to have a satisfying working life?
The role of career is a major topic of concern in modern society. It is argued that there may be a satisfying working life if a person chooses a career path soon in his life. I contend that this opinion may have both positive and negative aspects.
First, it is obvious evident that many people today are trying to find a job at a young age and keep doing that job for the rest of their life with a hope that they could get a stable life. Sometimes, this option is beneficial for those who want to make money for living, as a result, they could have a confortable life. In addition to that, applying a job early enables them to approach a lot of new things, helps them experience a variety of situations in which they have to show their abilities to solve the problems, as a result, they can learn many skills from their work. On the contrary, from my perspective, this selection may exert some negative impact on those people who do not have enough money, as a result, they can not afford to work soon without any money to carry on. Another reason is that, at that young age, they may have to work without any suggestion from their parents, their teachers, resulting in that they would select the wrong job.
There are many solutions to this issue, one of them is that they need to apply to a university in order to keep learning,experiencing and enhancing their skills. After school, they can work part time for some companies so as to be accustomed to their future job.
In conclusion, the opinion that people decide to keep working in a career path early is not always an advantagous choice. In my opinion, first of all, they need to learn and at the same time, they can work to experience and improve their abilities.
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- Subjects such as Art, Sport and Music are being dropped from the school curriculum for subjects such as Information Technology. Many people think children suffer as a result of these changes. To what extent would you support or reject the idea of moving t 11
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, so, as to, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1413.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45741324921 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49671738633 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507886435331 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.4416099035 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.75 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4166666667 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357149798523 0.244688304435 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134547285857 0.084324248473 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579168542645 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21233210712 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328507310984 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 12.4159519038 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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