Many people go to the university for academic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?
Nowadays, many people have access to higher education in the university, while there is a shortage of manual workers such as electricians and plumbers. In my opinion, I totally agree that we should encourage more people to do vocational training to reach a balance in the labour market.
There are some reasons why people have access to tertiary education. First, since a variety of jobs requires a great deal of special knowledge, graduates have to follow academic courses to pursue their careers. For example, doctors, who have to experience a 7-year-course, leading them have a full grasp of knowledge to save human lives. Second, by learning academic courses, graduates have chances to continue their higher education. This means that they are armed with fundamental knowledge to do research or study, which opens avenue for more human innovations and developments down the road.
Nevertheless, people should be encouraged to do more vocational trainings in lieu of solving a lack of qualified workers, such as electricians and plumbers. First, since vocational courses do not focus too much on theories but offer students a huge amount of practical knowledge, which lead to graduates can be easy to have a job after graduating. In fact, for some jobs, students can instantly put these knowledge into practice, helping them earn a living thanks to these trainings. Second, if students have access to academic courses, they can be unemployed in the future. This means that in some countries, such as Japan, they are facing with the shortage of manual jobs because of the aging-population, resulting in academic graduates cannot compete with qualified workers in the labour market. Besides, workshops in schools and advice from parents can help students to choose vocational careers by explaining the good employment prospects and payment for manual workers with qualifications and skills.
In conclusion, following academic courses is not an ultimate way, especially we are in an imbalance of the labour market. By considering all pros and cons, students can find best solutions for their careers.
- Many people go to the university for academic study More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers To what extend do you agree or disagree 73
- Many people go to the university for academic study More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers To what extend do you agree or disagree 73
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...idering all pros and cons, students can find best solutions for their careers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1777.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30447761194 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90798364881 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534328358209 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.061919243 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.466666667 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281600706336 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986909608764 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114999974895 0.0667982634062 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176187581171 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11978139495 0.056905535591 210% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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