Many people say the only way to guarantee getting a good job is to complete a course of university education others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work.How far do you agree or disagree with the above views?
It is believed that the higher degree brings more opportunities to find a job .Although many people go to university to find a job far more easily , I strongly disagree with that and believe if people receive training , they will have more chances to find jobs for the reasons below .
The first reason why working after school is claimed to be beneficial is obtaining some helpful skills , which give people the higher chances to find a job . People who work at younger ages will be more confident and independent because they have practical skills , while people who have higher degrees usually suffer from a lack of practical experience . Moreover, employers prefer to recruit people with technical capability. For example, teachers who have more experience seem more successful because they know to communicate with the vast variety of pupils, which has an important impact on their job.
The second reason why working after school is claimed to be helpful is the fact that people at universities do not learn essential skills, but only if they work, they will obtain skills, which help them find jobs.For instance, people who study genetics are not well trained and they do not have technical skills like extraction of the DNA from blood or analyzing the DNA
sequencing .
To sum up, universities help people to boost their knowledge and get a degree, but degrees cannot prove how well the person is able to deal with the job; therefore , while academic degrees reduce the chance to get involved in the labor market , skills have a more important role in finding a job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1313.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95471698113 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53547654738 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547169811321 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.2975951904 182% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.6939206244 49.4020404114 196% => OK
Chars per sentence: 187.571428571 106.682146367 176% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.8571428571 20.7667163134 182% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.0 7.06120827912 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216597262731 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109746654194 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402234731275 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140654251959 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0160236498369 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.8 13.0946893788 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.38 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 11.3001002004 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.1190380762 166% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.