Many people say that we now live in "consumer societies" where money and possessions are given too much importance. Others believe that consumer culture has played a vital role in improving our life.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In our consumerist society material goods are fundamental. While quite a number of people give them too much importance, others use them in a sensible way. In this essay, I will discuss first why money and possessions can have a positive role in people’s lives, and why for others they have negative effects on their lives.
Salaries and material goods are fundamental to satisfy many basic needs, as well as pleasurable desires. It is undebatable that nearly the totality of services that people need such as transport, electricity and supplying of food have a cost in terms of money so that the necessity of owning money. However, a person does not have to become a workaholic in order to buy all the things desired or promoted or to accumulate wealth but they can decide to work a fair amount of hours in order to buy the necessary things needed and leave enough time for leisure activities.
Some people spend all their time to work every day and this can negatively affect their quality of life. A typical example is given by my housemate who complains to have no time to enjoy his life because of his two full-time jobs. When I suggested that he should leave one of the jobs, he disagreed because he wants to save as much money as he can even if it will be overwhelming. Another example is given by people who buy a luxury car in order to appear to be rich even if they have a low salary. So, they may have to overwork to pay the bank loan for the car and cannot enjoy most of their time.
In conclusion, it is clear from my essay that while some people manage money in a rational way, others do not. Some people work in order to earn the right amount of money and enjoy their free time, whereas others do not enjoy the free time because of the desire to accumulate money.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e people manage money in a rational way, others do not. Some people work in order...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, well, whereas, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1483.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48036253776 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4468464272 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525679758308 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.7560275768 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.076923077 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4615384615 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92307692308 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133729709178 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525451646447 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381815196846 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0920123884179 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561661656467 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.0 12.4159519038 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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