The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below illustrate the Islip town Centre now, and plans for future Islip town Centre.

Overall, planned Islip town Centre will be developed by area, which will had a car park, bus station and new roads.

At the beginning, current Centre of Islip have only one road, which names Main road. To the north and south of the Main road, we can see shops. To the north of the fist shop, we can see Countryside while to the south of the second shop, we can see two housings and to the south-east of the shop, we can look at the park. To the west of the second housing, we can detect the school.

On the other hand, the planned development of Islip town Centre will be modernized by range. Main road will be demolished, and renamed to Pedestrians only. First shop will be modernized to four structures, which will be named like: Bus station, Shopping Centre, Car park and New housing. To the east of the housing will be erected new housing. Park will be become smaller while school will be made bigger.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 322, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t of the shop, we can look at the park. To the west of the second housing, we can ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, look, second, so, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 5.0 24.0651302605 21% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 825.0 1615.20841683 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 184.0 315.596192385 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48369565217 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 4.20363070211 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22483166671 2.80592935109 79% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 176.041082164 52% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494565217391 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 236.7 506.74238477 47% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3299844288 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.0 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7272727273 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45454545455 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130807519459 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711962788184 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10488147394 0.0667982634062 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138681958554 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133164300963 0.056905535591 234% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 13.0946893788 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 50.2224549098 161% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 11.3001002004 53% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.41 12.4159519038 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.58950901804 81% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 78.4519038076 38% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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