More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people suggest that the solution to this problem is to increase the price of fattening foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The number of people suffering from obesity is on the rise. While some believe that increasing fattening food prices can solve this problem, I hold a different perspective.
On the one hand, Obesity caused by a wide range of factors, such as insufficient physical activity, an unhealthy diet, mental health problems, and fattening food is just one of the various leading causes. Although increasing the cost of food riching in fat can prevent people from purchasing them, therefore reducing the higher risk of obesity, It might not ensure people maintain their weight sustainably unless they also eliminate other culprits leading to that health problem. Moreover, for those money is not a problem, this solution may not bring any positive effects.
Besides being not enough efficient, this policy can also put manufacturers and businesses in danger of bankrupt, hence thousands of employees might be made redundant. Despite the detrimental effects on our health, fattening foods, for example, sweets, chocolate or fast food are one of the best sale products due to their very affordable prices. When the costs rise, sales of this kind of food can drastically decrease as people will transform to other economical ways, for instance, cooking at home instead of visiting their favorite pizza joints. As a result, many companies, and restaurants might be closed since being unable to confront such an immediate situation, leading to a huge number of people being out of work. This is another challenge, requiring effort to address.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that increasing the costs of fattening products might not be effective, but also brings another negative effect. Those who are suffering from obesity, in my opinion, should be encouraged to create a healthy lifestyle in all aspects of life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1519.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25605536332 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7179572879 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622837370242 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.2850239999 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.583333333 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0833333333 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8333333333 7.06120827912 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188878263956 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072608479789 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586319588574 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13389096632 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795265565642 0.056905535591 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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