Many people claim that the government ought to spend money to keep artists continuing their job because this job is considered a low-paid job. While I agree they should receive financial support from the authorities, it is better when these supports come from other successful artists.
There are some reasons why the government should spend money on supporting people who work in art. Firstly, arts job are underestimated by many. In the modern world, since people tend to focus on the technology and business, they would probably underrate works of art, even some people consider them as useless things. Secondly, without income support, many artists will quit their job. After all, artists have to make a living; hence, they will choose other highly-paid jobs rather than their dream job if they do not have enough money for their fundamental needs. Finally, arts contributes tremendous values to the culture of a city or a country. Thus, it is reasonable for the government to support artists as a way to maintain and enhance arts industry.
On the other hand, artists’ income support should be given by other artists who succeed in their carers. It is not true that all artists have low income. In fact, there are plenty of people who are internationally famous in arts and they earn more money than any well-known professor or businessman. Therefore, themselves rather than the government should contribute their money to help their colleagues.
In conclusion, both the government and successful artists should support other artists who have financial problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, after all, even so, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1329.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21176470588 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72081698385 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564705882353 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3198943147 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9285714286 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2142857143 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224161413615 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0826044687809 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445693734316 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152309160629 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0219133262252 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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