This era is directly dedicated to develop the medical technologies and take them into the next level. Also, even though how important to possess these brand new technologies, it cannot fit with the need of every individual because they are limited. From my point of view, instead of wasting money to obtain those, it would be way more beneficial for both the country and people to spend money to educate the citizens well about their health.
To begin with, the knowledge about health is encourage the people to take care of them well and also help them to spend less purchase on the trivial things that could managed by themselves easily. Moreover, because the newest technologies require much work to produce, it is expensive and not affordable for the all countries in the world, especially for the third ones. I think people solve the disease without advanced technologies in the past, why cannot we educate people to do it as well rather than purchasing those expensive inventions. Even though how effective and functional the technologies are, people cannot fully dependent on those fragile things. As an illustration, there are many situations that went wrong because of the technology while there is a chance to save the person by hands of real person.
Furthermore, if countries educate their citizens about the health, it will affect numerously to decrease the risk of death. According to the statistics, many die because the people near them did not have any knowledge of first aid. So, I think this solution can presumably help to diminish the probability of death in places other than the hospital. In fact, elderly have a little information in medical based on their experience which makes it easier to educate everyone in the country. Also, in last decades, the number of death considerably decreased because many people interested in this field and made many new useful and essential inventions that brought a whole new era for human life.
All in all, regardless of how the rapid growth of technology influence in a positive way in our society, they also has many cons that outweigh its pros. It is not a good idea to buy many medical technologies they could purchase in order to keep people healthy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 46, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'encouraged'.
Suggestion: encouraged
...gin with, the knowledge about health is encourage the people to take care of them well an...
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Line 5, column 154, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun die seems to be countable; consider using: 'many dice', 'many dies'.
Suggestion: many dice; many dies
... of death. According to the statistics, many die because the people near them did not ha...
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Line 7, column 72, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...he rapid growth of technology influence in a positive way in our society, they also has many cons...
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Line 7, column 116, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
... positive way in our society, they also has many cons that outweigh its pros. It is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, third, well, while, i think, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1860.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64511289404 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 33.6366202556 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225949783506 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734637782265 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670734175029 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13678080801 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552392922784 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.