TOEFL TPO 10 - Integrated Writing Task

The reading passage suggests that the most influenced factor for the dramatic decrease of the sea other population is environmental pollution and provides three arguments with it. On the other hand, the lecturer disagrees with the ideas presented in the reading, she thinks it mostly impacted by the predators and casts doubt each of the author's idea.

First and foremost, the article claims that there are many sources exist along the Alaskan coast that causes pollution such as oil rigs and other industrial chemical pollution. However, the professor made a counterclaim to this idea by explaining that there is no evidence of dead otter found in a beach which is consistent with the theory of the predators rather than the pollution. According to her, because the predators eat the body of otter immediately, there is nothing left.

Secondly, the reading contends that the population of other species also declining such as seals and sea lions which can be only caused by the huge animals like an orca, but its diet mostly depends on the other whales. Nevertheless, the lecturer argued that the because of the humans, the whales disappeared in most areas. She also said that this causes the orca to change their diet from big whales to the small sea animals such as otter, sea lions and seals in order to not starve.

Thirdly and finally, the passage indicates that the population of the otter is uneven by the areas which can be explained by the theory of pollution. In contrast, the professor made a rejection to this point by saying that this could be better explained by the attacks of predators. Moreover, she said that in places which is not accessible for the orcas to live such as shallow watered areas, is the places where the population of the otter is relatively stable.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 339, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, as to, in contrast, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1489.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 305.0 270.72406181 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88196721311 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54303671682 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508196721311 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 456.3 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.5935910931 49.2860985944 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.363636364 110.228320801 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7272727273 21.698381199 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0909090909 7.06452816374 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372249953224 0.272083759551 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130152342844 0.0996497079465 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0871152721064 0.0662205650399 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204574660942 0.162205337803 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607401348018 0.0443174109184 137% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.0289183223 114% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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