Most of the schools are planning to replace sports and exercise classes with more academic sessions. What i s your opinion on this change? How is this change will affect children’s life in your view?
There is a trend amidst educational institutions towards the replacement of fitness classes with more significant ones such as Science.I disagree and think it will lead to some adverse ramifications which I am going to enunciate below.
Apparently,this alternation is undesirable due to the jeopardy in terms of health.In today’s challenging era,more pupils are not likely to go in for sports which is vital for their physical future lives.To cite an example, many children suffer from obesity and the main reason behind this is an inadequateness of motion.If the aforementioned act takes place,it will be appreciated as a step for upsurging the number of such children.
Secondly,these classes help the children to stimulate their cognitive developments such as co-operation.Playing with other children enhances the aptitude of team work which is predominant and superior whenever humans take a job.Apart from that,children learn to compete with each-other via these lessons.For instance,they tend to keep their places in such lessons besides academic ones.
Turning to the effects of this replacement,if children focus on only theoretical subjects,it can soar the vulnerability to the various maladies.Having said that,many pupils will allocate the time for the appropriate lessons and can do their utmost without any time restriction.
To sum up, schools should not be prone to change the classes,otherwise,it will result in a vast discrepancy which is directly bond up with healthy issues such as overweight or collaboration.Therefore, children must play and study both essential in their mental and physical developments.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, besides, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, apart from, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1401.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 245.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.71836734694 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.6978240278 2.80592935109 132% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.665306122449 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 49.0 20.2975951904 241% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.1835088301 49.4020404114 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 280.2 106.682146367 263% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 49.0 20.7667163134 236% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 20.4 7.06120827912 289% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.01903807615 398% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165955753396 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848904074103 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.01296149795 0.0667982634062 19% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0848904074103 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.01296149795 0.056905535591 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 30.0 13.0946893788 229% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 13.28 50.2224549098 26% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.44779559118 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.6 11.3001002004 209% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.78 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.29 8.58950901804 131% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 31.5 9.78957915832 322% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 21.6 10.1190380762 213% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 10.7795591182 278% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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