New-age celebrities from Instagram and TikTok are more famous for their glamorous lifestyle than their achievements. Does this affect the children who follow them? State your opinion.
More and more social media is used by current well-known people to express luxurious way of living rather than their achievement inflicting children behaviour. I, personally, state the same perspective of this issue which I will be elaborated more below.
On the one side, the popularity of new-age celebrities influences children the least due to discipline parental supervision which lead them to perceive important aspects of social and moral values. Kids Zone as parental application selects child-friendly content of TikTok use and block in-app purchases on smartphones. Furthermore, the supportive environment surroundings encourage children to stimulate self-awareness to be wise on social media. School, for instance, plays an important role shaping children’s characters during preadolescence. This helps them to create self-regulation abilities to respond negative Instagram content, suddenly popping-up on screen.
On the flip side, this circumstance would reduce children’s concentration in academic performance. Ones frequently set their style - being viral on Instagram - as an overriding factor of stylish look at school rather than being excel at school subjects. Consequently, many less likely engage in studying and encumber their cognitive development. In addition, platform media could provoke teenagers to risk-taking behaviours, in which their emotional instability induces how they desperately emulate their idol. It appears that the excessive exposure of high-end brands (Dior) is promoted by celebrities due to public compliment which Koreans’ adolescents crave on.
In conclusion, in my standpoint, the contributing factors of young teenagers greatly exposed by viral celebrities’ lifestyles has to be more concerned. Those include the loss of learning interest in school and the fearlessness of risk-taking decision. This is as long children keeps up with self-control to understand what the right or wrong is.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 61, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... standpoint, the contributing factors of young teenagers greatly exposed by viral...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, if, look, so, well, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1671.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.96785714286 5.12529762239 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.33429328263 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.685714285714 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.8849320038 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.4 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256071733209 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695935414806 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409091500092 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141810608725 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387064803061 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.35 12.4159519038 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.62 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 61, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... standpoint, the contributing factors of young teenagers greatly exposed by viral...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, if, look, so, well, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1671.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.96785714286 5.12529762239 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.33429328263 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.685714285714 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.8849320038 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.4 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256071733209 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695935414806 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409091500092 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141810608725 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387064803061 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.35 12.4159519038 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.62 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.