New-age celebrities from Instagram and TikTok are more famous for their glamorous lifestyle than their achievements. Does this affect the children who follow them? State your opinion.
More and more digital platforms are used by current prominent people which express the luxurious way of living rather than their accomplishments affecting to children’s behaviour. I, personally, state the same perspective of this issue which I elaborate more below.
On the one side, the children in discipline parental supervision the least are influenced by new-age celebrities on social media. Kids Zone as a parental application plays a crucial role to select child-friendly contents on TikTok use and block in-app purchases on smartphones. Furthermore, supportive environment surroundings contribute to foster children self-awareness to be wise on social media use. School, for instance, helps stimulating kids’ cognitive by developing academic situation. Therefore, this creates self-regulation abilities to be precluded by negative Instagram content, suddenly popping up on screen.
On the flip side, mostly children prefer to be stylish, being viral on Instagram, at school than comprehensive understanding in-depth school subjects. The emotional instability could encumber them in processing the development of critical thinking during preadolescent. It is proven that many children have a strong desire to instanly success. In addition, this circumstance provokes teenagers’ character to risk-taking bahaviours which afflict them to disaparetely emulate their idol with spending big-budgeting. The excessive exposure of high-end brands (Dior) is promoted by celebrities due to public compliments, which Korean’s adolescents crave on.
In conclusion, in my standpoint, the overriding factors of young teenagers greatly affected by viral celebrities’ lifestyle are to be concerned. Those include the loss of studying interest at school and fearlessness of taking risk decision. This is as long as children enable to build self-control how different the right or wrong is.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 433, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to stimulate' or 'stimulate'.
Suggestion: to stimulate; stimulate
... media use. School, for instance, helps stimulating kids’ cognitive by developing academic ...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... which Korean’s adolescents crave on. In conclusion, in my standpoint, the ove...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.0 5.12529762239 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.41878284522 2.80592935109 122% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.70479704797 0.561755894193 125% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0368956065 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.4 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0666666667 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13333333333 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231352724747 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621914966357 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447347930891 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127515944703 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409312045847 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.22 12.4159519038 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.0 8.58950901804 128% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 433, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to stimulate' or 'stimulate'.
Suggestion: to stimulate; stimulate
... media use. School, for instance, helps stimulating kids’ cognitive by developing academic ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... which Korean’s adolescents crave on. In conclusion, in my standpoint, the ove...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.0 5.12529762239 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.41878284522 2.80592935109 122% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.70479704797 0.561755894193 125% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0368956065 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.4 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0666666667 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13333333333 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231352724747 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621914966357 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447347930891 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127515944703 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409312045847 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.22 12.4159519038 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.0 8.58950901804 128% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.