NEW TECHNOLOGY HAVE CHANGED THE WAY CHILDREN SPEND THEIR FREE TIME. DO THE ADVANTAGES OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES?
It is true that advances in technology have resulted in changes in young children’s recreational activities. Despite some obvious drawbacks of this trend, I strongly believe that these are outweighed by the advantages.
The first major disadvantage is the lack of time for physical development which plays an integral part in maintaining a healthy lifestyle for humans. this means that if children devote much of their free time to playing with technological devices, including mobile phones and computers, instead of doing exercises and playing sports, they are likely to be suffered from health problems. Take obesity as an example, this is a popular disease among children caused by sitting in front of the screens for hours on end without doing any physical activities to burn calories. Furthermore, due to excessive reliance on the internet as well as the virtual world, young generations gradually have s no connectivity with their community. With some children, for example, face-to-face conversations are rare or they even do not stay in constant touch with their nearest neighbors, which apparently isolates themselves from society.
However, I believe that the pros are more significant than such cons. The most important reason for this view is that new technologies, especially the internet, encourage younger people to use their free time to broaden their horizons. In addition to news or articles, information is currently delivered through a various forms, including animated videos, short clips, interactive software and so on, due to for which transmission of knowledge seems to be more lively and interesting. Consequently, this shows the ability of technology to raise passion for learning in youngsters as well as support them to use their leisure time properly. My younger sister, for instance, is eager to spend hours on Youtube learning about animals, languages and numbers ever day by herself without any supervision from her parents.
In conclusion, although using technology for entertainment may cause some health problems as well as affect the ability of communication, the upside of this trend to promote the habit of self-study in the younger is more significant than these disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1900.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47550432277 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05554065261 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610951008646 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.2367715602 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.153846154 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6923076923 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6153846154 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242020638645 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784071453337 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628454414088 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127598124561 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628372170941 0.056905535591 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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