Now children spend a lot of time playing computer games and little time doing sports. Why is this? Do you think it is a posible or negative development?
Nowadays, many students are addicted to computer games while spend little time exercising. At the same time, however, there is some uncertainty as to the causes of this phenomenon, and how it might inflence children. In this essay, I will examine the issue and seek some possible effects.
To begin with, in regard to cause, it is undeniable that various attractive games would occupy students’ spare time as these games are usually designed by some famous professional experts in virtual games fields. They aim at creating games that make players emerse themslves in, let alone attract children who are less likely to control themselves. In addition, parents’ education would lead to the fact that children tend to play computer games at home. To be more specific, parents prefer to let children play computer games instead of going out for some sports in order that their children are less likely to get injured because sports are more dangerous.
On the other hand, as to impacts, children are possible to face health problems since they are lack of exercising. Doing sports regularly could help children build up there bodies, otherwise they would suffer from obesity problems and spine problems brought by sedentary habits. Furthermore, children’s sports ability would be weak and they may fail in sports exams for it used to be a golden opportunities for children to build their muscles and train their body coordination but they sit in front the chair and obtain nothing useful to their athletic ability.
To summarise, there is no doubt that interesting computergames would attract students a lot and their parent’s teaching also mislead them. At the same time, however, spending much time in front of the computer instead of doing sports may make children suffer from health problems and fail in the PE exams. In the final analysis, one can only conclude that this phenomenon is a negative development.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 399, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'opportunity'?
Suggestion: opportunity
...sports exams for it used to be a golden opportunities for children to build their muscles and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, while, as to, in addition, no doubt, in regard to, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14920634921 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71630668288 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55873015873 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7814695629 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.769230769 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2307692308 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92307692308 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254769243855 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0954267347687 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685121262994 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167046185143 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655220235117 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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