Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays, when we think of some public figures, only their glamorous lifestyles come into our mind first. While these famous people can set a bad example for children, I would argue that celebrities who act as positive role models also exist.
On one side of the argument, many celebrities whose fame and glamour are not rewarded in return for their concerted effort can be found plenty today. A person can become wealthy and successful for a number of reasons, marrying a rich partner, being inherited from his parents, or having attractive natural beauty, all of which do not involve career commitment. For instance, supermodels can be a bad example for children, who are trending for showing off their unrealistic beauty and partying. These kinds of celebrities can influence young people to have the idea that possessing a media profile and appearance are more straightforward than concentrating on school work in order to succeed.
On the other hand, there are also celebrities who are well-known solely for their professional milestones. All musicians, athletes, and actors achieve career achievements through practice and personal dedication. It inspires youngsters that an individual who works hard consistently will surely reach his goals at some point. For example, Jackie Chan, both an actor and martial artist, and Cristiano Ronaldo, a soccer player are taken as role models who start their lives from scratch to the stage where they are now.
In conclusion, I would admit that some celebrities are well-known for their luxurious lifestyles. However, most of them demonstrate that perseverance and ambition play a bigger role in a successful and wealthy life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...role in a successful and wealthy life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1426.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34082397004 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86930498698 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65543071161 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3350543092 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.833333333 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281143064867 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0989521912412 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692517890312 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158716683144 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519761937709 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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