It is claimed that people who is well-known in entertainment industry could make more money compared to one who have position in country authority system. I personally think this is because of the changing in social perspective and ensure that it could be the huge issues for the human’s development.
Obviously, there are two mains contributors affecting the general point of view of the society is that current situation and entertainment industry. The peaceful living condition is one of the cause leading to this problem. For example, in the past when there was the the uncountable conflicts, politician is believed to have the ability to enact the regulations which could impact directly on the society and improve it, but recently the importance of authority have been reduced due to the belief that they are infunctinal and it is the waite of money to keep them. By contrast, people tends to spend more money on entertaining which is the income on most celebtities, therefore, the
The different incomes between famous people and politicians are alarmingly and could cause the negative effects on social development. Firstly, there would be a lack of employees for the government activities. This could lead to the reduce in quality of some features such as public transportation, facilities, social investment, and so on. Secondly, people could be manipulated by the wider the impact of well-known people, this is due the fact that some young people in Japan spend all of their family saving on their celebrities live stream. While celebrities’s income raises illegally, the politicians who have right to adjust the problem are losing their willingness.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1405.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22304832714 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98491020314 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553903345725 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.2429549544 49.4020404114 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.5 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170998688404 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624169619006 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0303184180192 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116109476434 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00851365640053 0.056905535591 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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