Nowadays a large amount of advertising aiming at children should be banned because of the negative effects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some companies have start to advertise ads that aim at children. Admittedly, these advertisement help parents decided what to buy within various production, but it also brings negative influence on children themselves. From my perspective, I think advertisement that aims at children should not be banned, but need more strict censorship.
We cannot ignore the benefit that parents get from advertisement for children. First and foremost, advertisement that aim at accurate group of people, such as kids, can help consumers more when they feel hesitate on choosing things. For instance, advertisement about infant milk powder lead new mothers to choose whether they need when taking care of baby. And saving time and money in the results. Moreover, companies get more benefits from advertising on children. Many kids are not calm consumers and they always buy things without deep consideration if been recommended too many times. So companies can make more profits and development better.
However, when too many companies watch and wait to making money from children, some of them make advertisement with exaggerate information that cheat young consumers. For example, since young consumers have less knowledge on considering the true value of goods, some companies sell their goods in high price with exaggerated and attractive advertisement. The worse is, some of advertisement may cause young children have wrong value about goods and production and in a long term they may cultivate bad habit on money management. So a more strict censorship toward these ads should be pursue. And parents need to help their kids to shape a correct consumption view.
Overall, I have no objection toward this kind of advertisement, but appropriate ads should be provided to children all in all.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this advertisement' or 'these advertisements'?
Suggestion: this advertisement; these advertisements
...e ads that aim at children. Admittedly, these advertisement help parents decided what to buy within...
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Line 9, column 585, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pursued'?
Suggestion: pursued
...t censorship toward these ads should be pursue. And parents need to help their kids to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, for example, for instance, i think, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1516.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37588652482 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95266378536 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595744680851 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.8141626574 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.75 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18375670273 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675411981625 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645611901661 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13212896762 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0865579244662 0.056905535591 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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