Nowadays, young people spend too much of their free time in shopping malls. Some people fear that may have negative effects on the young people and the society they live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the present age, the young is excessively allocating their time for going shopping. It is argued that this tendency may exert undesirable impacts on the young and the society. In my opinion, I partially agree with the statement for some following reasons.
On the one hand, there are some reasons why shopping too much is detrimental. To begin with, shopaholics may not have enough money to spend on critical investments. This can be explained by the fact that the emergence of new products may increase people’s desire to purchase and consume more and more. Consequently, individuals cannot have enough money for other necessities like healthcare or education. In addition, shopping too much is really a waste of time. Not only allocating too much time for wandering around shopping malls can prevent young people from participating in outdoor activities but this also can lead to low performance at work or school.
On the other hand, I strongly believe that people paying regular visits to shopping malls brings some advantages. First of all, this tendency may boost the economic growth of a nation. This is understandable because the more products are sold , the more profit the producers can earn . As a result, the government may have a huge source of taxes used for poverty alleviation, illiteracy eradication and the fights against natural disasters. Secondly, shopping is a great way of relaxation and satisfaction. For example, purchasing some fashion items of luxury brands or technological devices can be the best way for some people to release the pressure and tension.
In conclusion, while I admit that young generations are excessively allocating their time for shopping , I still believe that shopping also reflect upon some benefits on individuals and the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1505.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22569444444 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95669671742 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572916666667 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.66093613 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0625 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.25 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267152716572 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0854914409933 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486461375651 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1644167795 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435240907604 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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