The number of overweight children in developed countries is increasing. Some people think this is due to problems such as the growing number of fast food outlets. Others believe that parents are to blame for not looking after their children's health.To wh

The proportion of children with obesity is increasing in numerous developed countries. When considering the underlying reason, some people claim that convenient access to fast food is the major reason; whereas, others should be blamed for not urging their obesy kids to keep a diet. This essay believe both circumstances induce the obesity of children; but ignorant parents are the main reason.

To begin with, fast food results in the phenomenon of obesy youngsters in certain degree. Due to the attributes of tasty and easily accessible, fast food can be frequently overconsumed by children. Therefore, youngsters who eat fast food without limitation will be obesy easily. That is one possible reason that children are obesy in many developed countries. However, if children participate in sports regularly, they may not be obesy at all. For instance, a child who enjoys fast food and football will grow up to be a healthy athlete because the fast food he consumed did not convert to fat and deposit in body, but consumed by body when he was racking on playground. Thus, people can not blame fast food for children's obesity. Besides, there are an enormous amount of people who also consume fast food everyday and yet not become obesy.

By way of contrast, irresponsible parents should be blamed for the obesity of their children. Parents are obliged to take care of their kids in every aspect, including eating habits and regular exercise. Firstly, parents can pursuade their children keep a diet if their children exhibit the sign of overconsume fast food. Secondly, parents should encourage their children to exercise regularly if their child are obesy. Lastly, if a child is obesy and hardly participates in sports, parents must take measures to assure their children keep fitness. Since parents have multiple stages to control the issue of obesity, parents are to blame if their children result in obesity.

To recapitulate, both fast food and careless parents are the reason of children obesity; however, this essay deems that parents are mainly to blame for their children's obesity.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: believes
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Suggestion: amounts
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, whereas, for instance, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1761.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1642228739 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63566057843 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507331378299 0.561755894193 90% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0330557749 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8333333333 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9444444444 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61111111111 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338656070725 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128997533465 0.084324248473 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651678571118 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23341503371 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0194572921508 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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