In order to reduce crime, we need to attack the cause of crime such as poverty and lack of educational opportunities. It’s not enough to simply have more police on the street and put more people into prison. Do you agree or disagree?
The action for mitigating amount of unployment and incompetence to continue study is very important even a lot of people stay in prison that is not guarantee to able wipe out the crime. I fully agree with this nation to declared that crime must be controll and so the rate of poorly and shortage of knowladge can be lower.
Firstly, the higher of total poverty will given affect to social economy everybody. Poverty was a phenomenon to changed all situation and behaviour of all people in the world until every single person taught that the life is not justice only getting the big tribulation. In other words, high levels of poverty make soecity restless and give up to the world, tools of measure to extend how difficult life is from economy and financial. For instance, papua became poorest province in Indonesia with significancy around 26% in 2022, the percentage indicated how many people to fulfill their needs, furthermore difficulty to get job is the most problem occured in that region. That's why we must attacking evil in order to be able alleviating the rate of poorest.
Secondly, a lot of people with the higher education can be prompeted progress of Indonesia. Every people with the biggest knowladge can give effect for some state because they are have ability to growth Indonesia with every science they get since in the primary school and the implication can make Indonesia position in the level up. Whereas, nowdays many people cutting their education because of incompetence to pay allowance and so they are decide to stay at home or find out some job to increase their life. For example, Several region in Indonesia has a regulations about free education but in another region determine to paid school fees, consequently a lot of teenagers can't study in some school this situasion showed the situation of the student in west Indonesia like papua and another city in there. Thus, the goverment must be necessary about educational situasion in Indonesia until can generate children with the high qualify.
To conclude, i strongly believe that the rate of poverty and shortage educational making some country can't to growth.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'give' or 'be given'?
Suggestion: give; be given
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'became the poorest'.
Suggestion: became the poorest
...nomy and financial. For instance, papua became poorest province in Indonesia with significancy...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'decided'.
Suggestion: decided
...etence to pay allowance and so they are decide to stay at home or find out some job to...
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Suggestion: Several regions
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a regulation' or simply 'regulations'?
Suggestion: a regulation; regulations
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, thus, whereas, for example, for instance, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96111111111 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61453675995 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538888888889 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.4817217322 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.384615385 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6923076923 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107578051697 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427458593782 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0238364200466 0.0667982634062 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0711039686819 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222882793072 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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