During the last decade the amount of overweight children in some countries have been increasing at around 20 percent,which has become a pressing problem for community.This essay will examine the main reason of this problem and the possible solution to tackle it.
There is no doubt that last 2 decades technology advancing rapidly ,which currently play a crucial role among people regardless to some hegative effects. For instance , in Japan, according to ASIAN statistics statement, 45 percent of new generation kids keen to use technology devices on everywhere irrespective place.Therefore, by major impact of technology vast majority of children has become lazy compare to elder generation when they were children.An additional cause is dehydrate foods ,which also play a vital role . To illustrate, fastfoods such as "BURGER KING" or "KFC" has become three times as popular as traditional home food.Consequently, children keen to eat fastfood rather than home food, which has more harmfull consequences for people.
On the one hand, there some effective ways to deal with that challenge such as control eating habits of children via an instructive cartoon. Cartoons from 80s year could be prime example , such as "Wolf and Rabit" where rabit teached for kids some an uselfull things. If goverment implent large-scale program ,which allocating budgets to add a cartoon ,It will bring multiple beneficiall consequences.Next step fighting with obesity is school nourishment, although some countries could be precious example for western society.
Ultimately, having analyzed main cause of pressing issue western society,I would suppose that measures always avaiable to fix it.
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- The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing. 84
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, so, therefore, for instance, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1452.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.671875 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17383441711 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.7109375 0.561755894193 127% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.9674896177 49.4020404114 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 181.5 106.682146367 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 20.7667163134 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119245851285 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510070895962 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431783502304 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.077815648233 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420429751456 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.3 13.0946893788 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 50.2224549098 61% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.2 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.59 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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