At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
In some countries, the number of young adults is having tendency to surpass that of senior citizens. While this trend has certain drawbacks, I believe that its benefits far more outweigh these potential disadvantages.
On the one hand, the country with this population structure has experienced several problems on employment and poverty. First of all, a youthful population is likely to face with a lack of availability of jobs. A sharp increase in the number of young adults produces an oversupply of work force, which put pressures on the country to fulfill its potential. Besides, in the foreseeable future, technology will gradually replace human labour in many tasks, which leads to high number of unemployment. Moreover, unemployment means that various families are stuck with poverty. If the government cannot afford services and housing to support those family, it will increase the number of homeless and possibility of social crimes.
On the other hand, high number of adolescence brings profound advantages such as a vibrant workforce, higher productivity and more taxpayers. Firstly, youth population provide economy with a fertile source of workforce. Also, the intensive competition in employment promotes people to improve their skills and abilities, then, supplying the economy a valuable source of qualified employee. Secondly, compared to the elderly, the young is more creative and productive. Their brilliant brain and energetic mind enable them to adopt new technology quickly and promote efficiency with their creativity. Last but not least, the government is able to receive more money from taxes due to the increasing young population. It is obvious that a rise in the number of employee leads to an equivalent increase in taxes. The surplus money might be spent for implementing policies to facilitate economy and social development, as well as to resolve other problems.
In conclusion, it is seems to me that it is advantageous in various ways for countries to have more young adults than elderly people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, as to, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38125 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93374094587 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59375 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.1363462311 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.294117647 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8235294118 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.70588235294 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232493491143 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675505430911 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416225847852 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136362477604 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274584356932 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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