Recently, certain nations around the world see comparatively larger numbers in their younger population than in the older generation. However, there are pros and cons in this situation. In my view, I opine the merits outweigh the demerits, which would be shed light on in the following paragraphs.
More number of young adults would benefit the society. Firstly, it could accelerate the productivity of a country. Young generation are more productive than the seniors because they are more sturdy and robust. If there is insufficient number in the young adults in the company or factory, the productivity is more likely to drop. For instance, Taiwan witnesses a massive decline in the productivity in the firms which undergo shortage of younger working force. Finally, larger quantities of younger population enhances the competitiveness of a country. This is particularly true due to the fact that the increasing population would create more difficulties in terms of the employment. In this way, it could stimulate more potential of a person and therefore, yielding more talented and competent employees. Hence, great deal of young adults is conducive to the community.
However, excessive number of younger generation could induce grave issues to the society as well. Redundant adults create unemployment in the job market. Since the number of younger adults are increasingly soaring, people will face more competition while they in search of job vacancies. This would render tremendous amount of people unemployed. A case in point is that Taiwan observes notable growth in the unemployment rate over the recent years, although there is a significant increase in their number of younger labors. Thus, younger adults incurs dreadful consequence to the society.
All in all, I firmly believe the advantages of having more younger adults far outweigh the disadvantage as it heightens the competitiveness in the society and bolster the productivity.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 55, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'younger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: younger
...firmly believe the advantages of having more younger adults far outweigh the disadvantage as...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41639344262 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00907880041 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531147540984 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2991583121 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9473684211 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0526315789 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42105263158 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155212165897 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0495834557606 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0414428613303 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0996638900989 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271727473272 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.86 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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