Question over the last few decades the media has promoted the image of young thin women as being ideal What problems has this caused What solutions can you suggest to this issue

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Question : over the last few decades , the media has promoted the image of young thin women as being ideal . What problems has this caused ? What solutions can you suggest to this issue ?

It is true that young slim females have been represented by the media for several decades , as they are an ideal image . It is regrettable that there are certain health and psychological issues which have stemmed from these promotions . I believe that this problem can be tackled taking several measures .

Perhaps the major problem associated with promoting young slender females on the media is related to health issues . Young girls look at them as role models in terms of their appearance , and try to become as slim as these promoted women are . They tend to refuse eating enough amount of food , so that they suffer from certain health problems , such as anemia , vitamin deficiency and lack of energy . The another problem , which has been caused by advertisements on the television , radio , newspapers about skinny female body , is linked to psychological issues . For example , rather overweight women might develop beliefs that they are not attractive enough for males , and therefore they may have low self –esteem . After all , all these issues do have negative effects on females’ performance , ranging from at school ( because they lack of energy ) to social relationships .
Turning to possible solutions , I think the most effective way to deal this problem is to educate people about healthy lifestyle and how dangerous it is to reduce food intake . If girls know about possible dangers to their health , they will probably restart consuming healthily . They also can keep fit doing regular physical exercise if they wish to be thin . The next step would be to reduce the number of advertisements which promote slim female body . As a result , women would not be persuaded that slender body is desirable . In addition , women should also need to understand the fact that having the kind of body shape can be inherited . There are some people who cannot gain weight even though they want , so that there is no need to be unconfident .
In conclusion , promoting thin women on the media , as perfect image for females , causes health and psychological issues among females . This problem can be solved through education and banning advertisements .

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also, if, look, may, so, therefore, after all, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13753581662 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72565285657 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547277936963 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.9902716674 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6111111111 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3888888889 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 46.0 5.01903807615 917% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249442776065 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0871111407009 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061502557467 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193204957891 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709353767623 0.056905535591 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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