Society is becoming obsessed with material goods like fast cars, designer clothes and flashy jewellery. We have stopped caring about the important things that is why divorce rates are so high and family bonds are not as strong anymore; our value system is disintegrating. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
For over two decades, with the proliferation of social media, we are inundated with celebrities’ and influencers’ luxurious lifestyles, which makes some people covet that life and end up purchasing expesive gadgets, designer labels, flashy cars and the like. Some experts say that this mentality, in the long term, could make our whole society’s value systems disintegrate. From my perspective, I partly agree with this statement.
To begin with, on the one hand, there are reasons why some people believe that materialism will adversely affect society. It is undeniable that materialism is associated with anxiety, depression and broken relationships. Some studies show that the more materialistic one becomes, the more he will experience unpleasant feelings. Those who are obsessed with the accumulation of material things will not be able to feel satisfied as they seek happines through acquisition, which only brings instant gratifiation. Therefore, these people will become more and more sefish and competitive and have a reduced sense of responsibility. Since materialists are less inclined to participate in demanding social activities, the relationships between individual members of a community will become superficial, transient and ad hoc.
However, on the other hand, I believe that those aforementioned are the highly visible minority. The truth is that there is much more to materialism than just monetary values. Nowadays, a growing number of materialists invest in community values. We cannot forget people who use their own money to travel to third world countries and offer free classes to poor children. Take Bill Gates - the billionaire as an example, he donated most of his fortune to well-meaning social programmes in order to secure a better world. And obviously, intimidating friendships and strong family ties still exist. Moreover, being materialistic may suit the flow of development more than remiscing about “good old days”. We are living in economically challenging time so it would be better for us to be a bit more competitive. It is clear that our society is evolving and it doesn’t mean that virtues decay.
In conclusion, though it is true that a highly visible minority of our society is deteriorating because of materialism, I strongly take the view that materialism is a part of world evolution and we should be more open-minded. Those who are obsessed with material goods will soon wake up to the fact that true happiness has nothing to do with being rich or famous.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and it doesn’t mean that virtues decay. In conclusion, though it is true that a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, third, well, in conclusion, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2124.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 398.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33668341709 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12813482442 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 176.041082164 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610552763819 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 506.74238477 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9026733416 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.2 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212588830793 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0545371818812 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037728593783 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125336055706 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295665222856 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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