Some countries encourage teenagers to have a part time job and see it as a good thing while others disagree Give your opinion and explain both views

These days, more and more undergraduates engage themselves in some part-time occupations. Thus, it is argued that whether youngsters should devote their time and energy to experiencing the working environment or they had better unwind and enjoy their teenage times when it’s possible. Hereafter, this essay will discuss both views.
On the one hand, plenty of people believe that participating in a temporary job means going over the security zone and opportunities to experience for teenagers. In other words, youngsters firstly can be independent in finance and therefore can almost meet their fundamental personal demands. Moreover, doing a part-time job make teenagers a general glance of the working environment, the pressure of completing workloads, and also building the ability to cope with deadlines and stress.
On the other hand, others claim that teenage times are the most valuable and pleasant period for youngsters to immerse themselves in learning and entertaining. According to this opinion, undergraduates do not have sufficient capacity to work and study under lots of pressure, hence, they should concentrate on academic and school activities. Besides, the working environment is complicated and hazardous with latent dangers whereas it is thought that youngsters are fragile and vulnerable.
In conclusion, the two mentioned viewpoints are all reasonable and contentious that it will be better for the adolescent to do a part-time job or to be exposed to educational activities. In my personal idea, I am prone to agree with the first given opinion, because youth is not only about learning and amusing, but about exploring and experiencing.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, hence, moreover, so, therefore, thus, whereas, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1413.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49805447471 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08124038366 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614785992218 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.313869254 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.454545455 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3636363636 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9090909091 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174871362934 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603188999202 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378293854679 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100719597033 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190361227598 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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