When discussing about the reasons leading to the serious problem that the health of human are now being threatened by different diseases, it is often believed that sedentary lifestyle is the main cause. In this essay, I would like to examine this viewpoint and provide my personal conclusion.
To begin with, a sedentary lifestyle is certainly a main cause for the growing number of people who are suffering from overweightness, obesity and diabetes in our society. In addition, as the heart needs more exercises in order to be stronger, sitting around too much can increase the problems of having cardiovascular diseases for people. Last but not least, this harmful lifestyle is also responsible for back aches, shoulder aches as well as other physical problems.
However, it should also be borne in mind that there are many different factors affecting human health. Firstly, alongside sedentary lifestyle, unhealthy diet is also a main reason of overweightness, obesity, diabetes and many heart-related diseases. In particularly, nowaday more and more people especially the young tend to consume a lot of fast food and canned food, which contain the high percentage of fat, instead of cooking nutritional meals themselves. Secondly, many products that we choose to use and consume in our life such as tobacco and alcohol can also lead to many common and deadly diseases, especially lung, throat and liver cancer. Finally, many urban residents especially small children, are suffering from serious breathing -related diseases such as asthma because of air pollution.
In conclusion, I personally believe that although a sedentary lifestyle is the main cause of many current medical problems, it is only of many equally serious causes. Both authority and individuals, therefore need to take action immediately to tackle this problems.
- Some people believe that people have the right to university education and government should make it free no matter what their financial background To what extent do you agree or disagree 73
- Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language To what estent do you agree with this statement 73
- In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food To what extent do you agree or disagree with 84
- Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction Do you agree or disagree Provide relevant examples if necessary 93
- At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages 78
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Suggestion: many
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ed to take action immediately to tackle this problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, as to, in addition, in conclusion, in particular, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1557.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3875432526 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89419426375 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615916955017 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5666810717 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.75 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0833333333 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.3333333333 7.06120827912 203% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142987741139 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0505114675802 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426137204963 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0827674430256 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499328332591 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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