In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
With the outcome of fast food and the growth of their success a growth of health disease linked to their consumption has been reviled. A BCC documentary released in 2010 has shown how an actor in good health had developed a tendency towards health problems after eating in a fast food every day for a month.
A proposal is higher tax on this kind of food. The benefits are that this could augments the cost of fast food and thus reducing users. For instance, Italy has proposed a tax on beverage with high content of sugar, although never imposing it.
The problems linked with this solution are that big companies could reduce even more the food quality to keep the same level of income and that a growth of costs and a reduction of users can’t protect those clients that will still eat fast food. The problem may be never resolved in this way.
In my opinion, the idea of pressing these companies with a monetary reform is the right way but proposing them incentives to increase their products quality could work even better and be more effective. Money awards to those who can use healthier products for their fast food can make a difference, letting clients eating healthier food without having to pay more and thus protecting them from health problems.
The proposed tax may work but there are more effective ways. Anyway, neither one of those methods can substitute the need for teaching people how fast food can ruin the health, starting from kids and reaching women and men who prefer a fast meal instead of an healthier one between one meeting and another.
- In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much food It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food To what extent do you agree or disagree with this 67
- The flow chart illustrates the consequence of deforestation Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features 78
- The pie charts below the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 78
- Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing for example through cellphone tracking and security cameras In many case theh people being monitored are unaware that this is happening Do you think the advantages 73
- Some people work for the same organisation all their working life Other think that it is better to work for different organisation 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 81, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'augment'
Suggestion: augment
... food. The benefits are that this could augments the cost of fast food and thus reducing...
^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 258, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...d men who prefer a fast meal instead of an healthier one between one meeting and a...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, if, may, so, still, thus, for instance, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1302.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71739130435 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30101846806 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547101449275 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 387.0 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.7216117096 49.4020404114 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.363636364 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0909090909 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.81818181818 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272451970542 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121223758228 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07759591565 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162061094068 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546232316992 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.