Nowadays, families try to do their utmost to make teenagers’ life comfortable, despite this, teenagers want to work in some part time jobs. Some people believe that they should be permitted but others suppose it is not beneficial to them. Each point of views will be discussed in this essay.
On the one hand, due to some people’s ideas, there are some advantages of teenager’s work. First of all, they face different minded people and various issues learn how to cope with them successfully. It helps out them to be aware of some difficult situations. Thus if they confront them for the second time, tackling these problems will be easy for them. Furthermore, in this way, thay can help their families with some of their expenses such as their tuition and etc. and it teach them how to responsible or how them deal with some problems.
On the other hand, the opposite group convince it is not pleasant idea and they believe that the work has some impacts on their future life which does not lead him to positive side. For instance, when they work around adults, maybe teenagers obtain their unpleasant behavior. Moreover, part time work keeps them away from the lessons and they cannot focus on it. For example, if a student work in a café 3 days a week on the afternoons, they would be tired and as a result they stay behind their classmates.
In conclusion, after watching these two opposite point of views, although some people suppose that working part time has beneficial impacts on teenagers, others is completely opposite this idea and it seems to me that if a teenager can maintain the balance between work and study, there will not be any detrimental influences on their future life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... be aware of some difficult situations. Thus if they confront them for the second ti...
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Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...of their expenses such as their tuition and etc. and it teach them how to responsible or...
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Line 2, column 487, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'teaches'?
Suggestion: teaches
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...though some people suppose that working part time has beneficial impacts on teenagers, ot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1425.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83050847458 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60218015681 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559322033898 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.0286303298 49.4020404114 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.785714286 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0714285714 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2142857143 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240979123369 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941629295151 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601672626947 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169399107281 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419903302867 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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