It is true that, particularly in developed countries, the youth of today enjoy longer lives and better health, but are not necessarily happier, despite all the material possessions that they have. I would argue that there is one principal reason why they are not happier, and some steps should be taken to deal with this situation.
The influence of commercial advertising is at the root of the dissatisfaction of today’s youngsters. Young people have become a target audience for the marketing industry,even children of 5 years old or younger. They are swayed by advertisements to adopt the values of the consumer society, possessing more and more things which, they are told, will bring them happiness, such as toys, electronic goods, a McDonald’s burger or the latest fashions. TV channels and online advertising persuade young people to buy. s impulsively. However, all this personal consumption has failed to bring happiness, and the false promises have resulted in disillusionment among young people.
Governments could immediately address this problem. They must introduce restrictions on advertising, and it would be even more effective to impose an official ban on all marketing. National and local authorities should allocate resources to schools to provide opportunities for young people to participate actively in sports or to take up a musical instrument. This will bring much more happiness and social interaction into the lives of today’s youth, rather than being passive individual consumers of everything, from violent video games to junk food. These two measures would certainly help efforts to bring more fulfilment and happiness into the lives of today’s youth.
In conclusion, by taking steps to curb the activities of the marketing industry, governments could help young people to develop into happier citizens of the future.
- Around the world many adults are working from home and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible 67
- The food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumer Some people think it would be better to our environment and economy if people only ate local produced food What extent do the advantages outweigh disadvantages 72
- Some companies sponsor sport as a way to advertise themselves Some people think it is good while others think there are disadvantages Discuss both views and give your opinion 78
- You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Write about the following topic Forests are the lungs of the earth Destruction of the world s forests amounts to death of the world we currently know To what extent do you agree or disagree Give reasons for y 78
- It is important for all towns and cities to have large public outdoor places like squares and parks To what extent do you agree or disagree 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: , even
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Suggestion: S
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, so, as to, in conclusion, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45328719723 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04976032866 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.63321799308 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.1579087127 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.230769231 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2307692308 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53846153846 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21118002169 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06700306192 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365363216373 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117958350892 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381636356298 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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