In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage?
Education always has controversial issues involving its methods and standards, sometimes including cultural differences. Many people argue that teaching young children that effort is the key for every achievements can help them build up a good personality while others believe it can bring plenty of negative effects.
On the one hand, some cultures consider attempt as the first-needed quality and want every generations to obtain it. It is a common belief that this kind of messages can draw in their mind a basic foundation of a good social contributer. Children can be more positive to deal with failures and dare to dream as well as achieve their ambitions. In many case, trying hard is an essential factor of a successful person as nothing is easy to obtain.
On the other hand, many people claim that trying hard is not the only quality needed for children. This kind of education, however, can put in them wrong opinions of dealing with things and how to achieve their goals. They may become idealistic dreamers who always try to obtain an unbelievable results and cannot evaluate things in many aspects. Sometimes, they give no care to risks and challenges that they may encounter and put the others in difficult situations. Moreover, when they realise that they cannot achieve everything with efforts, they may be disappointed and lose the ability to dream and cope with problems.
All things considered, I firmly believe that there are other approaches to educated a child about efforts. We should help them have a both positive and realistic vision of their life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a good personality while others believe it can bring plenty of negative effects....
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun case seems to be countable; consider using: 'many cases'.
Suggestion: many cases
... as well as achieve their ambitions. In many case, trying hard is an essential factor of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, while, kind of, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1323.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04961832061 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69647506914 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.606870229008 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.4347066871 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.769230769 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1538461538 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.30769230769 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261874005398 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0812082895479 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506856872588 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131462219288 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0921487322806 0.056905535591 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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