Some educators believe that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some educators believe that learning to play a musical instrument ought to be obligatory part of children's education. Nevertheless, I do not completely agree with compulsary music for all pupils.
Obviously, children have a variety of personality traits and interests. children should have rights to choose subjects that they desire to learn so that giving chance to select the subjects to be taught helps them express their opinions freely and feel confident . For instance, once a child is interested in medical science, then they must focus on learning biology and chemistry instead of spending time pointless to acquiring musical knowledge. This is because that doing an activity reluctanly do not lead to academic success
Furthermore, spendings for purchasing a musical instrument can be a challenge for parents who are on a tight budget. Buying additional musical instrument for them create problems related to provide financial security of the families.
Moreover, promoting to teach how to play a musical instrument will not be beneficial as it is considered as a pastime activity like singing, painting, pthotography rather than being a part of curriculum of educational institutions.
To conclude, children should be free to choose what they want to learn in order to avoid adverse effects of forcing.
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furthermore, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1120.0 1615.20841683 69% => OK
No of words: 206.0 315.596192385 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43689320388 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 4.20363070211 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06123186262 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.660194174757 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 344.7 506.74238477 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.3387708948 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.0 106.682146367 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4285714286 20.7667163134 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42857142857 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312920865272 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132757937538 0.084324248473 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0870597583436 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166399718668 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0820434312579 0.056905535591 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.83 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.7795591182 186% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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